Dude!
This was pretty sweet, but your potential is held back big time!!!
Some pointers...
-The same guitar riff gets REALLY repetitive after a while, there's nothing else going on really. I mean, it changes up once, then what happens then? Nothing else. Just one guitar solo. That kinda blows the song out of what it really could do. Nice riff, bad working of the song to make it diverse.
-I'm a drummer too. Now, I'm not trying to offend you in any sort of way, but seriously, start playing more, and more, and practice more, and more. You're using very generic fills, going from the snare to the low toms most of the time, and they're not going to help you. You've gotta break your boundaries and start developing your fills. Also, tranfering your beats, like from one beat to another, were not pleasant. They didn't groove nicely with the riff, either because it was the beat, or because you were shifting tempos way too much. You've got lots of potential, but you're not there at all. To groove, you're beats and fill MUST be smooth, you can't have choppyness like you had. Some of the beats were just like that, and they were fine. But other times, you had EXTREME gaps between your fills and beats and the sort. Keep playing with people!!! It's the only way to get better at being a band.
-What's with the child's voices in the backround? It's was wierd with that ambience in the backround. Make sure you don't have extra noice around you when recording.
-Overall, I'm not saying this is bad, but you've got a ways to go with developing a song. Keep goint at it!!! And check some of my stuff.
-SuperDrummer146